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          “The shoes aren’t right.”
          “Hm?”
          “The shoes, these shoes,” she said.  “They’re all wrong with this dress.”
          He glanced over at her.  “They’re fine.”
          It was the first time he’d looked up in twenty minutes.  She was standing in front of the mirror, her entire collection of shoes scattered in hurricane-aftermath fashion around her feet.  He was sitting on the edge of the bed with his book.  Like always.  Like Sunday-morning-through-Saturday-night, one-break-to-watch-the-six-o’clock-news, never-bother-to-find-a-real-job—just like that.  There was a book in his hands when he turned off the light at exactly 11:30 every night and when he woke up at 8:00 the next morning.  She swore he’d read every book in the house at least six times through.
          She kicked off the pair of red heels that she’d never really liked in the first place and walked over to his side of the bed, kneeling at his feet and resting her arms across his lap.
          “You promised to take me out tonight, you know.”  She had extracted the promise from him late the night before, after the book was laid aside, the lights were turned out, and he was half asleep.
          “Mm.”
          She pulled the book out of his hands and laid it face down on the bed.  Something by Salinger.  Salinger was his favorite, though she never understood why.  Dry as dust, that one, and not an ounce of romantic intrigue.
          “For our anniversary.  You didn’t forget, did you?”
          “No.”  His eyes flicked back and forth across her forehead and the tip of her nose, but never managed to settle anywhere in between.
          “You didn’t forget?”
          “No.”
          “Do you love me more than those books of yours?”
          “Of course.”
          “Even Salinger?”
          He put a stiff hand on top of her head and made an awkward attempt to stroke her hair.  “Even Salinger.”
          She smiled ever so slightly—just enough to make him try to smile in return—and stood up.  Walked over to the closet and pushed the piles of shoes behind the door with the side of her foot.  Went into the bathroom.  Took off her earrings and laid them inside her jewelry case.  Took off her dress.
          Wrapped in the folds of a silk nightgown, she came back into the bedroom and gently closed the door.  She took the book by Salinger from the edge of the bed, still face down, and marked his place—page 117, was it?  Yes, of course that was it.  She crawled into bed and leaned carefully across to put the book on his nightstand, right next to his alarm clock, which was set for exactly 8:00am.  Just where he liked it.
          11:30pm. She switched off the light.  After a few minutes, when she knew he would be just starting to fall asleep, she rolled over toward his side of the bed.
          “It’s our anniversary tomorrow, you know,” she whispered, her lips brushing up against his pillow.  “You’ll take me out somewhere, won’t you?  Somewhere nice, so I can wear that new dress you bought me? Maybe we could even go dancing, just like we used to.  You’ll take me, won’t you?  Promise?”

          And his pillow, as silent, as cold, as empty as it had been for 17 years, gave a promise just as cold and empty as it had given every night before.
©2008-2010 ~tragicreciprocity
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Author's Comments

Dialogue Scene #1: Obsession.

I had no idea where this was going whenI started it, and to be completely honest, I have no idea how it ended up where it did. Funny how writing often turns out that way.

And for the record, I adore Salinger. Really.

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:iconnighthawk663:
This is really bizarre... it gave me goosebumps at the end, I don't even know what it means...

Is he dead? Is he just really detached and she can get away with that? Does he forget every day's memories? I don't understand..


..but it's awesome.

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:icontragicreciprocity:
Thank you so much, I really appreciate the comment (and of course the :+fav:!):)

Certainly it's open to interpretation, but in my understanding, yes, he is dead - he's been dead for 17 years, but she's been in such a state of denial for so long that she endlessly relives (hallucinates, maybe) the last night he was alive. I agonized over the ending for a long time, because I couldn't figure out what to do with the male character - he's definitely not the most dynamic personality, and was hard to do very much with. So then I thought, "well...but what if he's not even really there?" And thus this ending was born. ;) Thanks again!

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Oh my goodness. I wasn't expecting that. I'm so glad I decided to read this.
The characters were really well developed, and the dialogue was flawless, really natural. The story itself was...touching, I really enjoyed it. At first I thought he was one of those people with memory loss, but then...yeah...so sad.

I love Salinger too:)

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Wow, nice twist! I think it's just me but I have a feeling she killed him and just repressed the memory of the murder and thus can't move on with life. She seems the neurotic type. I know how annoying it can be to have someone just...never... put down the book. Actually, the reason I know this is because I'm the one with the books and other people yell at me haha. Just my interpretation though. I really enjoyed this.
And I'm curious, what was he reading? Is there a significance to page 117 or is it just where he was at when he died?
I myself haven't read much by Salinger, just Catcher in the Rye, but I've been interested in some of his stories for a while.
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Hmm...I never actually thought of that, but the whole murder thing seems pretty plausible, really...hehe.
I didn't really have any particular book in mind, so page 117 is kind of random to - but yes, I was thinking that's the page he was on when he died. Ironically, Catcher in the Rye is pretty much the only book of Salinger's that I haven't read, though I own it and have been wanting to read it for a long time. I love his books of short stories - Franny and Zooey, Nine Stories, etc. They tend a bit toward the depressive side, and I kind of wish he didn't insist on swearing every other word, but there's just something I love about their honesty.

Thank you so much for the comment! :)

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Thank you very much, I really appreciate it! :D

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I think this is one of my favorites out of all your gallery. :D
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Thanks so much! :hug:

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